Silverwing|ThunderClan|Warrior|She-cat

[::Phoenix::]

Name: Silverwing
Age: 22 moons
Do you Honor?: StarClan
Mate:
Kits:
Gender: She-cat
Clan: ThunderClan
Rank: Warrior
Breed: Short-hair
Appearance:

Silverwing is small and nimble, and has silvery blue fur, as well as strange marks along her legs and spine. Her eyes are ice blue and piercing. Her claws are long and sharp, and can shred prey easily. Or an enemy, for that matter. She has very short fur, but not to the extent that she doesn't have any cover in leaf bare. Due to her small size, she is able to do things other cats would have more trouble with, like jumping onto another cat's back. The fact that there's less weight to deal with always helps. Her whiskers are short as well, but are still in proportion to her body.

Personality:

Silverwing can be very full of herself, but once she realizes how she's acted, she instantly tries to reform and show how she really is: sweet and caring. She loves small cats, especially apprentices and kits. She is often known to be competitive as well as sweet, but this side doesn't come out much around the kits. She knows that when she has an apprentice, she will teach it anything she can, which for her, is everything she knows. She has had her eye on a tom for a while, but another she-cat beat her to the punch. She hasn't really been to vicious to the she-cat, but it is obvious enough that she's jealous.

History:

Silverkit was born in newleaf, when most kits are born. She had a brother and a sister, one of which was still-born. The still-born one was named after her father, Blackfang, and became Fangkit. Her sister, on the other hand, was Goldenkit, after her mother, Goldenfeather.

She was all about being with her sister, after the loss of her brother. She hadn't really known him, but to have been born along with a dead brother shocked them both. She went through apprentice-hood, as well as her kit-hood, caring for Goldenpaw. And though Goldenpaw seemed weak and unworthy of being a warrior, she became one with the help of Silverpaw. If Silverpaw hadn't been helping and comforting her, Goldenpaw probably would have gone insane from her shock. They're still friends after all of that had happened, and now Goldensight has a mate and kits of her own, all of which are healthy.

She obviously felt a need to comfort and console her parents as well as her sister, but the time constraints that came with becoming as warrior held her back from doing so, up until the last possible moment.

Her parents were both very devoted warriors, but did not get far up on the ladder of Clan status. They were still alive when she became an apprentice, as well as a warrior. However, a couple moons after becoming a warrior, she was thrown into chaos when her parents died in a greencough breakout the past leaf-bare. She was dragging her feet for weeks after that, so to speak. She did things properly, but without much enthusiasm.

She hasn't had an apprentice yet, therefore she has no hope of becoming a deputy yet and fulfilling the dream she always knew her parents had for her: to become leader. That ruled her for a while as an apprentice; what would any cat want better than to please their parents?

After the initial shock of the loss, she regained herself and caught back onto what was now her own dream. She knew that to do this, she'd need to outsmart, outshine, and out-everything everyone else. She aimed to do that with all of her attempts at her chores, and still does.

Roleplay Example:

Silverpaw strutted through the Clan proudly. She had just caught a rabbit the size of herself! Well, okay, maybe a bit smaller than me... But not much! she thought fiercely to herself. After coming back from the successful hunting trip, she had gone straight to the leader to give the rabbit as prey. Well, to show off too, but that came with the package. Who wouldn't show off to the leader, what with becoming a warrior so soon?

Of course, after her leader not being there, she had taken it to the Medicine Cat. She was the most important cat in the Clan beside the leader. Where would they be if they had no one to help heal them when they were broken?

She tripped suddenly; a branch had fallen, and she hadn't seen it in her thoughts. She glanced around quickly, trying to make sure she hadn't been seen tripping up over herself. That definitely wouldn't be good for her small moment of fame.

No one had seen, luckily. I guess it'd be best if I stopped trying to get the attention, or else it'll come the wrong way!

Pictures:

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Codeword:

-Edited by Rain-

[.Rain.]

Don't forget to capitalize all of your 'Clan's.

In her breed, you don't need to include the word domestic. It is assumed.

If you would like to make your appearance a better quality, you may want to try turning the stuff in brackets into sentences. That's another two sentences, at least, right there.

The last sentence in your personality sounds a bit awkward. I understand what you are saying, but you may want to re-word it.

New leaf is spelled newleaf.

In her history, you may want to elaborate. I would suggest you try reading some of the accepted bios. I would suggest that you elaborate on her siblings and her parents. Most kits form some sort of bond with their siblings, be it good or bad. Try giving them names.

If she doesn't have enthusiasm, she doesn't have ecstasy. I would suggest you change that sot hat it sounds a bit less redundant.

And also... It would be beyond difficult for a cat to catch a rabbit the same size that they are. You may want to put something in there about her exaggerating or something like that.

Overall not a bad bio, although vague in places. Just a few changed and she'll be all set to go.

[::Phoenix::]

Okay. Better? x]

[.Rain.]

Much. THis is a huge improvement. Just a couple of things.

First, the do you honor box empties itself whenever you edit, so don't forget to put her preference in there.

Also, her eyes cannot "stun if stared at too long." It's not an ability that cats have. (On a side note, she seems to look exactly like my Raincloud xD)

And, I'd just like you to mention what happened to her sister in the history, please. Just a little bit about still being friends with her sister, or if her sister is dead, how she died.

And then this will be all ready for accepting.

[::Phoenix::]

Mmkay. Done :]

[Lawly-Pop]

Kay, she looks fine as far as I can tell. =) Just the 'Clan' in the title, but I'll fix it for you.

Accepted as warrior of ThunderClan