Goldenlight l RiverCan l Warrior l She-cat

[catybug]

Name: Goldenlight
Age: 25 Moons
Honors: StarClan
Mate: N/A
Kits: N/a
Gender: She-cat
Clan: RiverClan
Rank: Warrior
Appearance:

Goldenlight is a pretty, golden, short-haired she-cat with a white muzzle, and dark ginger tabby markings on top of her head on ears. Her eyes are a golden color, and her nose a pretty pink.
She has a very lean build, with small, almost fragile looking paws - her delicate appearance balanced out by noticeably sharp claws. She is fairly decent at hunting, and can also do well in fighting - but only if her opponent is slower than her.. She is also a very good swimmer, perfect for a RiverClan cat.

Personality:

Stubborn. Very, very stubborn. Once she sets her mind to something, she won’t back down no matter what. Because of this, she can often find herself in a jam she refuses to let someone else get her out of.She thinks she can talk her way out of most things, plus she believes that most have important things to do then bail her out of trouble.She seems to be very self confident, almost to the point of arrogance.
Looking past her stubbornness and strong will, she is a very kind and gentle cat who loves to have fun.. She prefers not to fight. She will only fight when she has too, preferring to talk things out.

She is very opinionated, going hand and hand with her strong will. Most of the time she will respect a higher rank...unless she thinks they are wrong. Then she would, of course, call them out on it, but only then. Normally she tries to be as respectful as possible.

She is very out going. Though, despite her friendly and outgoing nature, she hasn't let anyone get too close to her in a very long time.

History:

Goldenkit's early life wasn't too eventful. She was born to a queen named Gentleflower, who later died, and a male named Blazeheart. The only thing truly eventful in her early life was her befriending of Dark-kit - an all black tom-kit with bright green eyes. He was a kit that was hated almost since birth because he was a half Clan cat.She became his only friend, and the two grew up together.

Eventually, Goldenkit became Goldenpaw and was apprenticed to Foxheart - a well respected cat within the Clan. Dark-kit became Darkpaw, and was apprenticed to Goldenpaw's father, Blazepelt. Cats who said that Darkpaw wasn't the best apprentice was definitely an understatement. He was moody, rude, sharp tongued, and very short tempered. He openly cursed the warrior code and StarClan. The hatred the Clan had towards him had turned him bitter and distrusting at a very early age. He distrusted nearly every cat, except for Goldenpaw...she was the only cat he'd ever confided in, the only cat he ever trusted.She was the only cat he ever truly cared about; all of this was much to the dismay of Blazeheart, Goldenpaw's father. He did his best to keep Darkpaw busy and force the two apart - even going as far as to tell Goldenpaw that she was forbidden from seeing the apprentice without another cat present. This of course didn't stop his headstrong daughter. Soon the two young cats fell in love.

Eventually Goldenpaw became Goldenlight, named so for her kind nature. Though Darkpaw, for obvious reasons, was deemed not yet ready to be a warrior. .He grew very angry at this, and as she approached him, expecting a congratulations, Darkpaw attacked her, obviously aiming to kill.. Blazeheart lunged at him, knocking the young tom off his daughter, and upon an order from the leader for Darkpaw to be banished, chased the black tom from the camp. Goldenlight was tended to by Raincloud. Thankfully her injuries were just a few scratches, nothing serious. That was as far as the physical injuries went, anyway. Emotionally, she was well... a wreck. Almost immediately after she was checked out by Raincloud, she ran off into the forest after her father and the cat she loved. She found him dead, Darkpaw standing over his body. Blazeheart was a fine warrior, yes, but he had gotten old... and Darkpaw, being his apprentice, knew his weaknesses. She stood there, dumbstruck as Darkpaw looked at her once, before turning around and jumping into the river. That was the last she saw of him. That was only 9 moons ago.

Roleplay Example:

Everything blurred past her as she ran deeper and deeper into RiverClan territory, barley dodging trees as they came into view. She had to find them. She wasn't quite sure what she would do when she did, but she just had too. Many thought raced through her head. Why had Darkpaw attacked her? He loved her...didn't he? As much as she loved him?

The rushing of water could be heard, she was nearing the river. She skidded to a halt, panting heavily before looking up, her eyes widening at what she saw. The cat she loved...standing over a body...Blazeheart’s. The black tom was just sitting there, starring down at the body of his mentor, seeming surprisingly calm. "D-Darkpaw?" the small ginger she-cat stammered. The tom looked up, green eyes met gold ones. Those green eyes...there was something malicious....something evil in them, but also a sadness. He then stood, and took a running jumped off the bank "Darkpaw!!"

Pictures:

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Codeword:

-not needed-

[.:Fawn:.]

=) Alrighty.

Please capialize "Clan" in the title, and for Honors:, it should be StarClan, not Star-clan.

The first sentence of her appearance is a fragment.
"Goldenlight is a beautiful short-haired, golden she-cat."

I think this sentence should be rephrased a little bit. =) it'll just flow better, I think.

She has a very lean build, and her paws are small and almost fragile looking...though that is balanced out by sharp claws.

"She has a very lean build, with small, almost fragile looking paws - her delicate appearance balanced out by noticeably sharp claws."

The sentence after that ends oddly too. o.O

She is pretty good at hunting and also fighting if the other cat is slower than her.

Try, "She is fairly decent at hunting, and can also do well in fighting - but only if her opponent is slower than her."

^^! On to personality!

Though most of the time she will respect a higher rank...unless she thinks they are wrong.

^^ you don't need the "Though" in front of it. Just "Most of the time she will respect a higher rank, unless she thinks they're wrong."

=) I'll check the history after these errors are corrected.

[catybug]

Done~

[.:Fawn:.]

Personality:

She thinks she can talk her way out of most things… Plus she believes most have more important things to do.

=) I think you can join these two sentences together, if you like. "She thinks she can talk her way out of most things, plus she believes that most have important things to do then bail her out of trouble."


History:

The hate the clan had towards him had turned him bitter and distrusting at a very early age.

I think you mean hatred, "The hatred the Clan had for him had turned him bitter and distrusting at a very early age."

Clan needs to be capitalized. ^^


^^ there. Just fix these, and then I think we'll be good to go.

[catybug]

Done~

[.:Fawn:.]

All checked and lookin' spiffy? =) Then without further ado,

Accepted as Warrior of RiverClan!

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